Skinny, torn, abused and worn
Tight are these pants that I do adorn
Showing the form like softcore porn
Have to peel them off like husk on corn
~
Safety pins, like jewels on denim
Black markered poems infect the fabric like venom
Cuffs high on purpose, that’s because I pin em’
Everybody wonders how the hell I get in them
~
When they come off my skin takes a vacation
Girl pants, I buy em’ …from the Army of Salvation
Emo Fashion Girl Pants Safety Pins
June 19th, 2007 at 1:46 pm
This is good. Skorp is Emo.
June 22nd, 2007 at 10:43 am
This is really weak poetry. Here are some steps for improvement: 1. Rhyme has to serve a purpose. Here it’s forced and corny. You should probably not rhyme.
2. Inversion is very hard in modern English. If you’re not good at it, stop it.
3. Variety will help you. We get that they’re tight pants. Show some variety in your exploration of a subject.
So far, these are bad hipster hip-hop lyrics. Keep on revising and eventually you’re going to get some poetry.
June 22nd, 2007 at 11:13 am
You make Emo Student sad when you speak about his elementary style writing of poetry….Thank you!
June 22nd, 2007 at 11:53 am
Shawn is just jealous you stole his idea for the girl’s pants poem he was gonna write into a song for his Good Charlotte look-a-like band.
June 22nd, 2007 at 2:12 pm
this is a cool poem.
June 24th, 2007 at 11:28 am
Who doesn’t like bad hipster hip-hop lyrics? Awesome poetry, xDDDD
July 2nd, 2007 at 10:24 pm
I like it. My poems are better. They’re not “dark” though. They’re about heartache.
July 17th, 2007 at 1:29 am
lol i showed this poem to my friends and they all thort it rocked
hey u know ive wrote a poem that would make all true emos cut and cry in darkness for eternity after they read it
July 29th, 2007 at 12:21 am
the poem was fcuking awesomo! shawn, the person prolly aint even a poet, and i think he was wik, so go cry!!
July 29th, 2007 at 8:09 pm
This is to shawn.
i think your right, but this is someones poems ay…
they’re original i think.
but as i said i think your rite… i agree with your tips
xxx
July 30th, 2007 at 1:54 am
shawn… keep it to urself. i think teh poems alright coz it’s unique. i get wher yuh cummin at but, to improve u need to keep tryin. yea i’m soundin hippeish…
July 30th, 2007 at 9:51 pm
look.. your all reading to much into the poem.. its funny
shawn
you have to much time on your hands
you are probably fat
July 31st, 2007 at 11:15 pm
shawn you fuckin cunt doin all this shit im goin to find you and bash the fuck out of you c.u.n.t emo prick GRR YOUR FUCKED MATE
August 1st, 2007 at 5:01 am
h3a lol. xactly ur probably fat h3a
November 16th, 2007 at 5:12 pm
but why teh fuck r u gonna bash Shaun?
he did’nt swear or threaten anyone?
fuck off….
i guess he was reading into teh poem a bit to much liek someone mentioned but..
so..?
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December 10th, 2007 at 10:14 am
******ya’ll all are fuckin retarded emo people cut there selfs sumtimes over all this bullshit drama and now ya’ll are gonna bring it on there space ya’ll all need to chill and drop it for the best of every emo kid that gets on here and no’s sum one ya no what i mean***********im emo and i HATE drama ************
December 21st, 2007 at 9:45 am
people cut the people that make these poems some slack god everyone has there own styles of writing and instead of critazizing them appreticate them Jen (12)
December 21st, 2007 at 7:55 pm
hey you know what i loved about this before shawn’s comment? that nobody was taking this too seriously, you laughed you moved on…thnx shawn for being too serious about life…ah the irony.
December 28th, 2007 at 12:07 am
lOl at comment before me.
December 30th, 2007 at 11:53 am
shawn do everyone a favor and kill yourself
January 5th, 2008 at 12:16 pm
Shawn doesnt need to die he just needs to stop criticising other peoples poems.
February 17th, 2008 at 3:30 pm
it reminds me of my friend noah!!!
it takes forever for him to get his pants off!!!
February 26th, 2008 at 11:47 am
i love em… goodwil sux, cuz they only have fat ppl sizez… but at erm hot topic, they have these ones that are tight like girl pants, but have room for a dewd to fit, if u no what i meeen…
R.i.p. (M)
March 8th, 2008 at 9:40 am
yeah i wish i didnt have hips so i too could join the ranks of civil disobedience
April 3rd, 2008 at 10:05 pm
freaky that i had my pants safety pinned tight to the limit, before i even knew that was considered emo.
*checks another emo quality off list*
haha.
July 19th, 2008 at 1:38 am
Dude, if you peeps were actually emo you wouldn’t be hanging around a site created for the purpose of secretly making fun of emo’s, crazing on about your emo-ness. Your just contributing to the joke.
You all give emo’s a bad name anyway, you know what emo really means? Emotive Hardcore. It was used originally to describe people who liked hardcore music a long time ago, not “emotional” or whatever the shiz you all wanna-be posers call it. Be real or die a loser, learn the culture before you dye you hair, cut your freakin wrists and claim to be emo. It’s a way of life, not something you just pick up on and claim it as your title. Idiots